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Fool's Creation

The god of fools took a handful of filth
He then mixed it to sugar, vinegar, pepper and pill
When he finished the amalgam - it was a TONGUE.

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What usually come out of people's mouth? Filth, sugar-coated lies, sour and peppery remarks and bitter words.

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  • Virgoan
    November 18
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    The poem is really good in its brevity. The placing of words will be more effective if you'll place it somewhere.

    My take on this:

    The tongue: an amalgam,
    a handful of filth with a mixture
    of sugar, vinegar, pepper, and pill

    hand-made by god of fools.


    Just my thoughts. Other than that this is cool.

    Thanks and regards,

    Hensley


  • Theappleofyoureye
    November 9
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    Very nice play on words. =}