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she spun my ego around her delicate finger,
pointed and aimed for my affection.
her love was always considered a overrated crime;
they had warned me with kind agony
and sweet words.
but when you're young,
it's in your blood to see wrong as right.
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Author notes
Prompt:
'i wonder how many girls have sex because there’s no one to dance with'
- philosphyofkate
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The last line of this is amazing. I suppose I've been thinking about it a lot lately and you said it just right. Congrats.
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hope you dont mimd but everything i have read of yours i have loved so im going to add you as a favorite.
loved it yet again
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well done!
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Adored this muchly~
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thankyou
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beautifully blunt. it reminds me of the pictures on TV of people who have survived some sort of attack, that they show because people want to see. Just today, on Oprah, there was this woman who was apparently (I didn't really catch the whole episode) ravaged by some sort of animal.
i could feel that sort of interesting desire to know in this poem.
amazing write !
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ahh that would have been interesting, i should of watched it.
thank you for your comment.
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it was. but it was still kind of disturbing. I was amazed, though, at her determined attitude and perseverance through life, even though she lost half her arm, her eyesight and her other hand. It's those kinds of people who really make you feel like you're lucky to be here, healthy and happy. She was quite inspiring.
you're welcome for the comment, it was my pleasure
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makes me feel like a ungrateful little bastard.
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crap, thats inspiring...and yet disturbing.
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yes. makes you think, doesn't it?
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Very nice piece.
I loved the bluntness in this. So true. When we're young everything is right. 
Short but not lacking anything.
One suggestion: its should be it's and your should be you're.
Very well done.
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thank you, fixed it
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