Terrified.
Walls caving in,
people seem distant,
loud noises,
ringing in my ear,
make it stop.
Terrified.
Can't stand up,
can't even move,
I feel numb,
no control.
Darkness coming,
head spinning,
please make it stop.
Terrified.
Body shaking,
can't stop sweating.
What's going on?
I'm losing my mind,
I just keep falling.
Will this ever stop?
Terrified.
Coming back,
finally getting a grip.
Noises going away,
darkness fading,
vision becoming clear,
calming down,
I'm okay
I'm okay.
Never been so terrified.
feedback would be wonderful :]
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Well structured, it was a very pacy read, which fitted with the subject of sheer terror.
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much appreciated!
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ah, this is interesting. u did a very good job of making it really real. i like the very last line and how u repeated i'm okay twice. great write =)
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thanks so much hun! :]
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I actually. Like, I love the desperation i nthe tone, and how the repeating of the word terrified effects the reader.
It's just, an incredibly awesome piece : D
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aw thanks girl!
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Always welcome, [:
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