Let the weight of water
carry me into tomorrow's arms;
wash away this appetite for destruction
like soap against decaying skin.
Let the weight of water
become an unrelenting tide;
oppressor to those dreams of denial
that forge the fallacy of existence.
Follow the dim glimmer of light
down old forgotten pathways;
opening your mind to a higher understanding
of what it means to simply be.
Breathe deep between the lines
of antiquated conversation;
extracting all the wisdom within
and wrap yourself in that blanket of truth.
Let the weight of water,
deliver absolution
in its purest form.
Author notes
Make of it what you will, I'm sure some will identify with the underlying sentiment.
A contest entry
- BWOW~~Best Write of the Week~~#26...with aboomer, and Starz of Heaven by islekine.
700 points, ended November 15, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I appreciate sincerity and type-o spotting over flattery
Comments
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I agree this is a great write as always thanks for taking the time to enter our contest have a great weekend best wishes to you always be well
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Much enjoyed this. Great wording and depth made this a pleasure to read. I also really like the title for this.
very nicely done
thank you for your entry
best wishes in the contest
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I truly enjoyed this entry.
One of your finer. I like the change of pace...and the write. I found myself letting the water beat on me...wonderful imagery...and such a deep message...all the way through...Thanks for your continued support of our contests...I look forward to your entries! Best wishes in the contest and always...
Write on and on...
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Nice vivid imagery for cleansing the mind and finding the truth.
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Oh, this is truly excellent....
One of your very best written pieces and I mean that...
Wow...this touched me. I am so glad I read it...As always, I am in awe of your talent
Lynda
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kind of seems like I could sense what you were dealing with and poured this from your very soul. I am honoured that this touched you but knowing the situation I am a little saddened as well. love you and I wish I could be closer in this time of need dear cuz.
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thank you dear cuz I feel you close even though you are far away
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I really like the imagery of the different roles of water and how you applied them with progressive depth as the meaning got deeper.
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thanks for the thoughtful feedback my old friend, glad to see you back here mate, how have you been?
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Let the weight of water cleanse and renew us! Form a deeper meaning of almost rebirth. Taking in all senses from within one's self. Deliver us from absolution! Love that line.
Wonderful poem once again my friend. Good luck in your contest.
~Sie
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