My heart brims with lifes' empty promises
where once it was filled with love
now leaking tears
to make room
again
A contest entry
- Quick...Hurry... Closes Tonight by StormGoddess.
600 points, ended November 8, 15 entries
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Very nice. Thanks so much for entering my contest.
Good luck to ya!
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Excellent take in my opinion. I love the ending--making room--hope still there in spite of pain. Vey creative and well expressed! I like the sequence of brims, filled, leaking. Great write!
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how clever writing it like a heart shape! Was it on purpose! what a brilliant idea - these can be so difficult where there is only so many words you can use! but you did it wonderfully in this poem - kind sad however, but the ' make room again' is uplifting!
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Thank-you
Hopefully not too sad, I believe it is good to make room in your heart by having a good cry, if that makes sense.
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Oh wow, this is beautiful. You did an excellent job with this and I love the way the stanza comes down into a point like a heart. Great write, Keep it up and good luck in all you do.
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Good work with this. I can see how it could fit into the prompt, so good job with that. And well done for only 20 words.
Thanks for entering and goodl luck
storm
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