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...falling?

Evolution
of the lovers
as evolving
seeking; finding...
ever trysting
souls desire
nonconforming
as confirming
with lack luster
sermonizing
as our hearts
are harmonizing
spin the bottle
Kiss and tell
as in awe,
in lust we fell

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  • sinfull
    November 9

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    it's about discovery. the same ritual friendship follows...without the lust. bonding? cool. sermonizing scares me. I always hide my knuckles to save them from the ruler


  • UncleDunk gold member
    November 8

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    Fast paced - it read smooth, and the final four lines - WOW - Very nice.