scent of the sea
salt and ice
the warmth of the spray on my skin
the sunset aglow in the distance
to alight our conversation
the divinity spreading
that was the night
you told me how you felt
and by my dying breath
you would have been
to send angels for my heart
to protect my soul from harm
i know i loved you years before
but you never knew untill now
my saviour my heart
my drug my knight
in my last minutes will you tell me
in my last seconds would you hold me
i leave the world now alone as always
but i love you now more than ever before
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This is beautiful, i love how you created this picture in my head before launching into the story,
theres just one part that confused me
"and by my dying breath
you would have been"
i wasnt sure what you meant by that beause it didnt slow into the next stanza.
But that aside i really enjoyed reading this, you put so much emotion into it tht it made me sad, made me feel for the character.
Well done
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I think this is a love poem, but it made me really sad. So... I dunno.
Its touching, and understandable. I'm no critic, I enjoyed the read.
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lols
thanks for the kind reveiw sometimes i enjoy just getting reveiws like urs not critical or harsh just mellow and mild and yeah it was a tragic love story i kinda stole the theme from a song i know its called Love You To Death- Kamelot its great u should check it out sometime especially the lyrics
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