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You touch my cheek
Voice quiet as you speak
Whispering in my ear

Cold as a fire
Touch my face a bit higher
It's like everyone else disappears

Brush back my hair
Hold my eyes in a stare
Those eyes I'm sure to miss

With your arm around me
Your hand on my knee
I really wanted that kiss

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  • Glass Heart
    November 8
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    I know, it's not a poem about betrayal and stuff.
    Yes we were seperated and no, the kiss didn't happen.


  • Nikonic Freak silver member
    November 8

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    Um, wow.

    This is quite different from what you've posted before, Kal.
    ...
    I LOVE IT!!

    I understand the feelings you convey here.
    "It's like everything else disappears"
    VERY good line. ^

    The ending, though, confuses me. Did you get the kiss or did you not? and "those eyes I'm sure to miss" - what do you mean by that? are you soon to be separated? you could be a little more clear with that.

    but really. overall, this is epic.
    <3