We were so inlove,
That's what I thought.
Two hearts connected,
Becoming one.
You were once my heart,
You were once my soul.
I see everything clearer now,
I was wrong all along.
You had nothing,
You had no one.
I gave up everything,
I had for you.
Literally gave it all up,
Didn't even think twice.
My love for you meant more,
Then any possession could.
What's a house,
What's clothes?
When I had your love,
Your arms around me.
You became a prostitute,
Drugs were more important.
When I became sick,
You left me in the dark.
Thought I'd die,
Without you.
But I'm still here,
"I'm still breathing!"
Author notes
This poem is about my ex gf Lea who left me for drugs. I had given up everything for her. She was homeless and couldn't live where I was living at the time so I chose to leave my home and my stuff to be with her cause I didn't want her being homeless alone in the middle of winter. So to make a long story short...I got really sick and couldn't walk and that's when she became a prostitute and basically chose drugs over me. Now I am starting from scratch and will not make that same mistake again. I will love someone who shows love for me too! Not just something one sided.
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I am very sorry about your experiences with your ex. That is terrible!
It's awesome, though, that you aren't so bitter you won't look for love again... and that you realize you should look for something that isn't one sided. Very wise
I'm proud of you!
Awesome write! This is your way of getting justice against her! Writing it out... and maybe someday you'll be famous and you can say "haha! look what you're missing out on!"
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lol awww thank you for a wonderful, motivating comment! I really appreciate you reading and commenting on my poem! Yes I guess this is justice against her. And shit I hope I become famous oneday lmao cause then I might have a better chance at getting the women of my dreams lol!!!
Thanks again for reading and for hosting this contest! Have a great day!
Sincerely,
Sarah
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*nods*
Right mate , I know what its like to lose someone this way ... I never gave up my home and possessions however , but the heartbreak of losing someone to something so meaningless as drugs , and so terrible as prostitution , is something that simply blind sides those that it happens to ... A Grand write mate ! Write on , and Keep yourself true to you .
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It makes me sad that you can relate to my poem and what happened in my past relationship but it also comforts me knowing that I am not alone when it comes to such heartache and cruelness. Thanks for reading and taking the time out to comment as well. Makes me feel good! Hope your weekend is going good though it's almost over.
Sincerely,
Sarah
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Anytime lass !
Any time ...
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"I was wrong along."
Do you mean all along?
"What's a house
What's clothes."
A ? at the end of that, right?
Sorry, figured I point that out.
Nugget,
When you're writing about something personal that has a lot more meaning and emotion to it then anyone reading it actually realizes...then its a good poem.
There really isn't any if ands or buts about it. A write that you put your heart into, that's what makes it perfect.
Much love and many hugs,
Your Poptart.
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Thank you my lovely poptart!!! I knew I could count on you to leave a good comment! And thank you so much for pointing those two things out. Hahahaha I read this poem over again about 4 times and still failed to realize those two mistakes until you showed me lol. I fixed them though!!!
Thank you for reading and commenting and helping me! You're the best indeed!!!
Love Always,
Nugget
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