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coffee stains.

she traded her frothy skin cells for more swarthy ones; curled ones. they hung closely, nipping her neck and teasing her scalp. each morning she'd wake and find dusted cells clinging to her silk pillow, her roots bleached, having been kissed by the sun.

...
she frowned. it was a molded emotion. like all the others.
...

swiftly she tossed her hair, down then back up, returning to her original auricomous shade. straight and saucy bleeding into the brunette ashes; like varnished coffee stains.







Author notes

Prompt:
I’ve spent so long in the darkness,
I’ve almost forgotten how beautiful the light is.
-Tim Burton's "The Corpse Bride"

Blond girl, dyes her hair brown. She then steps into a world like the Stepford wives. Everyone the same, in the case the same hair color. Then she dips her hair and back she goes, blondie again. But then remains of the dusty brown still linger.

Trying something new, so in this case "darkness" is brown hair.
"Light" is blond hair.

Hope you like it (:

NOTE: 16 lines because of all the spaces

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  • melmo
    November 10

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    wow

    so deepazing...you make something so simple compilcated with beauty and passion...this is very well written...and im glad to read something so nice...great job


  • sinkfloridasink
    November 9

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    wow, I really like this...alot. It was very beautiful and the syntax made me smile

  • n.e.o.n gold member
    November 9

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    This is really beautiful. I loved the imagery and the emotions you conveyed. Fantastic job and keep the pieces coming.


  • downstairs
    November 9

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    This is fascinating.

    straight and saucy bleeding into the brunette ashes; like varnished coffee stains.
    - I adore the imagery in this line, especially the brunette ashes.

     

    ♥


  • Not-The-Sun
    November 9

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    having been kissed by the sun.

    ...
    she frowned. it was a molded emotion. like all the others.
    ...

    swiftly she tossed her hair, down then back up, returning to her original auricomous shade. straight and saucy bleeding into the brunette ashes; like varnished coffee stains.


    love this part the most; the single line in the middle is fascinating. and the other parts are just filled with beauty thanks for entering : )

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