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Flipping Off The Light

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smokey desert waving,
      mirages like race car alcohol fumes burning far away,
                            where cactus blossoms root 
                      in purest of seas 
           
       the mouths of many dry skulls grin, they
     mocked the writhing



           snow gathers dogma moon and shadow lights
              pierced by the grays of trees
         and mountain-tossed stars
                they roll accordian motion sparks 
                                   like oceanic fish swarms

    the lost trudger will die by morning 
      in desolation or live entranced still and bestirred 
even into the afternoon forever



a brilliance moments unborn
and poems and songs
          and gigantic new heartbeats
    like the surprising Bluebird's solo in air a power 

charmed by her mouth, her eyes
traces of a longing innocence
         how she once rose in a long lost garden
    spirits hover and pray that she will be their shining bloom

but then she said she'd rather be dead than alone 
she'd rather be dead alone rather than be
dead together
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 



 

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prompt #7 - lips smoke by Ilze Zarane

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  • Sprite silver member
    November 16
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    Wow. I am in love.


    This is just beautifully written. The mood you have set is thoroughly engaging the reader's emotions. (More gushing...unwritten.) The "Snow gathers..." stanza is brilliant. The ending is very true to the entire tone of this poem and to the picture you chose.

    Where have you been all the times I have been reading on the site??? ( Of course, I come and go...Going to mark you so I can read more of yours!

    I am sure that you will win this contest. Congrats on this clever write.

    ~ Joyce


  • Night Hope gold member
    November 10
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    Firstly, I liked the inferred nuances of your title. Your imagery is wild and barely contained within the confines of the imagined borders of the page - the words seem to want to leap off, like a lean panther. Your lines "snow gathers dogma moon and shadow lights/pierced by the grays of trees/and mountain-tossed stars" are visceral and quite powerful examples of what words and the sounds of them can do to your readers. In its entirety, this is an incredible piece of work. Stunning, really. Good luck in the contest, Sweetie.