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I love you so

I know I had a lot to say
I was so mad
But talking to you made my day
Now I have no reason to be sad
You make me feel so great
I would be nothing without you
You're there when it's very late
I'm lucky to have a friend like you
No one could take you away
You would never leave
I know you’re here to stay
I know I've not been deceived.
You’re a great guy you love me
I don't know why
But we're meant to be
You make me smile
When you talk to me
I wish you could stay for a while
You hate to go I see
But it's ok
It won't be long
You'll be back tomorrow anyways
So say so long
No one could take you away
You would never leave
I know you’re here to stay
I know I've not been deceived
You're a great guy
you love me
I don't know why
But we're meant to be
It's hard to believe
your so perfect
I can see
How you love me
We have a beautiful romance
We are in love
We're together at last
This is a gift from above
No one could take you away
You would not leave
I know you're here to stay
I know I've not been deceived
You’re a great guy
You love me
I don't know why
But we're meant to be
It's so crazy
Can't you see
We go together perfectly
This is amazing
Amazing
No one could take you away
You would never leave
I know you're here to stay
I know I've not been deceived
You’re a great guy
You love me
I don't know why
But we were meant to be
I love you so.

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This is a really old poem that I wrote last year. I plan to edit it late, but tell me how I can make it better.

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  • Devine.identity
    November 8

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    !!!! great feeling to be in love isn't it? I wish you could stay for a while
    You hate to go I see
    But it's ok
    It won't be long
    You'll be back tomorrow anyways

    those lines kinda make me sad, your lucky to have your man so close, I am three hours away from the boy I want to marry, we met when we we're 15, i never thought i would see him again then we met up three years later no talking, and everything fell into place, this touched my heart what you wrote, stay strong you two will last for ever if you are happy and both want this,


    more about your write, i think some of it was a bit too repetitive, however its your words and structure so great job anyway.


    • MoreTears2Fall
      November 8
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      Well I'm glad you liked it. I hope things go good for you and your guy. It sounds like you have something really good going. The long distance must suck, but at least when you see each other it makes the moments you spend together even more special.