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Truth Elixir; Shaken not Stirred

Oh, how I want her
on bended knee
I plot to capture her soul
so I can simply ravish her body
and be done with her

Aw, look how he grovels
I know he wants me
I'll tease him with drunken innuendos of fellatio
have him empty his wallet wetting my whistle
and then kick him to the curb
and leave laughing with my girls

Witness how I lubricate them both
easily extorting their true personalities
they are both wide eyed, yet blind
selfishly seeing only their base carnal desires








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  • Tercarro
    November 17
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    I liked this

    It made me want to go get those fems and tame them once and for all, not that I could but, I really got tied into this work which is what made it good to read. You have a mind unlike no other. Great stuff.
    TC


    • tombruize
      November 17
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      Whoa!!

      Thanks Tercarro... your compliments blow me away. I don't know if I am deserving of THAT praise, but I'm human so keep it coming!!! LOL Thanks again...


  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    November 11
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    LMAO
    You must have run into the same women I met at bars
    Alluring eyes..i'm a sucker to be reeled in
    Buy them a bunch of drinks, dance a little
    Go home alone flat ass broke
    No wonder I don't have a good savings account now
    wish you the best..David


    • tombruize
      November 12
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      Thanks David...

      I appreciate the comment and I hope you learn to stay away from the femme fatales.


  • TrixieOne
    November 8
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    Very sexy and true and sad, all at the same time. Yes, females are very wicked! I'd use another word but I'm in a good mood. I just hope that you escaped the game this time and have created this piece in thoughtful contemplation and not in jail for homocide lmao!
    J/K I loved this piece and I'm looking forward to more. Been a while since we've done a back-n-forth. Be cool brotha

    • tombruize
      November 8
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      True

      Females can be wicked... be the male character here is not on his best behavior either. lol I do appreciate you coming back around and dropping a comment on my write. Thanks for the appearance and the comment. K.I.T.


  • laura0757 silver member
    November 8

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    oh i how I love wrting and reading erotica, so when I saw this title i clicked and read yours,,i loved it........I love the way you used your words..and I am a big fan or erotic writing since I love writting it as well...mine are not as elaborate as this one, but its a great subject matter. and it stirs up some sences that for some are asleep.......not me thank god..............the best to you in this contest this one would be gold if I was a judge, which I am not...but I thought it was great keep up the great work.......and thanks for sharing..

    • tombruize
      November 8
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      Thanks...

      I really appreciate such a gracious comment and compliment. Thank you ever so much. I promise that I will TRY to keep up the 'great' work as you call it. Stop by anytime and glance over my scribblings...

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