Rich was his soul and poor he was
the fertility sprang and ideas came
the words spewed and were welded by brain waves
the idea was complete and he sang
the song was on hum and music about to come
tones and notes do not need much prompts
words are enough to give them birth
they run the entire gamut from a fruit knife to whole earth
slowly the jigsaw puzzle got solved
and most barring few were involved
it flew from lip to lip
each having a heavenly bit of its sip
the word and tunes was a song
a celestial and heavenly song
that pantomimed all right and wrong
made the people swoon
they lived earth but thoght moon
universe came alive
and astral vistas were also in vibe
the song became a rage
for all those
that were on righteous wage.
Author notes
for all those
that were on righteous wage.
Please tell me what you think
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I'm surprised with your writing,
congratulations!
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wow
amazing piece of writing
this is a beautiful write
Full of emotion
thank you for sharing
keep the ink flowing
fire
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excellent~
I think you have shown the reader that words can be taken and read any which way the poet interperts them
The words and tunes was a song
a celestial and heavenly song
I would change one of those to lines that had song in it
Great poem but one line does need to fixed
Other than that it read beautifully
Hugs
Susan~~~~
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This is very nice and makes one think.
it flew from lip to lip
each having a heavenly bit of its sip
the word and tunes was a song
a celestial and heavenly song
that pantomimed all right and wrong
made the people swoon
That part was so deep and lovely. Thank you for the read.
Brook
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"it flew from lip to lip each having a heavenly bit of its sip" my favorite verse! Good Job, Great Lyrics
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Sorry,
forgot the most important part, applauding you! lol
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Wow. Just wow is all I can find to describe your brilliant work here.
My favorite line was the whole,
"tones and notes do not need much prompts
words are enough to give them birth" - You clearly address the power that words can have on a song (or anything, at that), which to me is most important.
Very clever piece of writing you have here. Well done -
this is a really beautiful piece of art...bravo...T
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what a beautiful piece you penned here,
and very thought provoking!
your write rings true of a message for all to read
just stunning!! you deserve a whole box for a
clappies!! you can return the favvor if you like too
love and blessings
Rend
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as all the pieces to the puzzle come together to finish the piece then the true message will unfold and all the message will be received.. full of imagery and words to ponder on well penned as always hugs Angel♥
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this was thought provoking and intense, full of wonderful imagery and descriptions. I really enjoyed reading it. =}
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this is conceptually phenominal...wow..i LOVE this write...the third line really hit me...the origin of thought and creation...music, the universal language...your words play this song flawlessly...the end is killer and brings it all together...i adore the last ten lines...you are such a uniquely gifted person...thank you for this, i need it today...write on, poet
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