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She is a doll

At one time she was beautiful.
She had a voice that was heard by everyone.
Her hair gleamed with color and perfectioin in every curl.
A smile that was so real it lit up a whole room, with happiness.
And her eyes shined with hope and love.

But you no longer love this doll.

For...
She has no voice,fake hair,a fake smile, her eye don't shine like the sun anymore.
She doesn't looks perfect all the time.

But know one know's that she's screaming behind that smile.
The curls in her hair from when her owner still cared.
The color that was so radient.
She has a voice that is only heard by the blade on her arm.
And her eyes shine from the tears that she cries.

So after the years of hate and neglect.

Her smile that held in her screams finally wore off.
The curls have finally lost their bounce.
The red in her hair has finally lost its color.
The little bit of voice she did have, has finally dissapeared.
And her eyes no longer shine because she is out of tears to cry.

Because you never loved her and when she finally relized it she broke...

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  • Eyes-of-a-tragedy
    November 26
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    It's pretty well written, I like how you compared this girl to a doll.


  • xXlove.she.wroteXx
    November 10

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    awwso sad, but amazingly good! loved the last line, the flow was outstanding!!


  • xXListen2theRainXx
    November 9
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    OMG, This Poem...AMAZING!!! I <3 It(: You Are Talented. I Wish I Could Write Like That!

    OMG, This Poem...AMAZING!!! I <3 It(: You Are Talented. I Wish I Could Write Like That!


  • hershey101
    November 8

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    awwww this was very sad do this poem describes you? oh well this waz a great poem thoo veryhy sad i really like it you couldve put this in my contest you wouldve been one of the finalists list but oh well best of luck...


  • XXheartbroken3XX
    November 8
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    awwwwwww sooooo sad =( but i like it! has a nice flow... Keep up the good work


  • Fairy Princess
    November 8
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    sad

    it is sad, but its also really good. i like this, nice job. keep writing!

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