why do I feel like such a failure?
I can't do anything right
even when I do good things
yet people only remember my mistakes
I don't ride a high horse
I'm no saint
it's true
but stop reminding me of
each and every single mistake
that I have made
there's no reason
to hound.....and hound.....and hound
the past is the past
it's over and done with
I can't change it
I can only learn from it
and I am learning
I'm learning everyday
yet you still think I'm a failure
no wonder why I feel like a failure
Author notes
Prompt: Failure : 20 lines or less
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Surround Yourself with People For Your Highest Good
I Begin by looking at my mistakes - change that thought ...now as they are lessons.
True these lessons were learned the hard way.
Regrets we all still have.
Move on to those who surround you that are family and negative - I am sure the ones pointing the finger - if they look at them selves have as much or more to be regretful for.
Finally I look at the people outside of my family who remark in a negative way and separate yourself from them ...
There is a difference in constructive critisim from some one who cares,
Then there are those who build them selves up ...by putting others down.
I found your poem easy for young and old a like to relate to - thank you for writing and posting,
Best of Wishes,
Sincerely,
Cheryl
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i am sorry you feel this way
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wow. I can definitly relate to this very well, as well as many many others. Its something everyone at some point in time can understand.
thanks for entering.
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I like this one it is true in so many ways .
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God I have walked miles upon miles in these proverbial shoes...Someone wise once told me that the past is best left in the past or it will come back and bite you in the ass if unearthed...Something along those lines anyway...Good write for those who can most definitely relate. ~gypsy~
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Wonderful piece. It is true, you often believe what people make you believe, I can only hope that you don't consider yourself a failure anymore...there's too much good in you to think that. Great job, thank you so much for entering.
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Perfection has been achieved!
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thanks for both comments! i wouldn't call it perfection, but thank you so much!
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Awesome! There was only one tiny bit that seemed a bit out of place
it seems that people only remember my mistakes
It seemed too long to fit with the stanza and the flow of the poem.
Yet people only remember mistakes
Anyway just my opinion
I loved the repetition you used. The repetition of hounding was done well and something that generally I would have believed not to work, but you've proved me wrong. The repetition of learning and failure in the final stanza is done well. I love how it begins with learning then ends with failure. A very interesting way to portray it. The imagery was superb. A great write that was quiet enjoyable
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you were right, it did seem a bit off at that spot. thanks for the idea! also glad that you liked the repitition of 'hounding'. i wasn't sure how some people would react to it. thanks for liking !
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touching
touching and easy to empathise with for some people.
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excellent penning dear
you send a strong message with this piece..i look at this from a child's point-of-view..telling a child that he or she "can't" often leads to a self-fulfilling prophecy of failure..our minds don't like self-failures as is..being heckled by others is just plain rude and feelings are easily hurt [possitive egoes as well]
very well done!..wish you the very best..
ssss David 
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