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Betrayal: Inspired by Sylvia Plath

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Her decline into obsolescence is near-perfect.
Her stiff upper lip curves into a ghastly smile
she never once assembled in life.
 
Her illusions are mythic in proportion,
as indecipherable as Sanskrit.
 
Her florid feet have stopped dancing,
grown weary of rhythm.
 
Her folded hands, emptied of promises
and flowers she can no longer deliver,
pre-arranged.
 
The cereus is now deep with silence.
The pale moon flutters weakly, quiet
in a sky suddenly bereft of song.
 
She will become accustomed to this different fable,
this new and ancient shroud,
given time.
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

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Graphic artist unknown
 
 
Inspired by the movie "City of Angels" and by reading:
 

Edge

by Sylvia Plath 

 

The woman is perfected.
Her dead

Body wears the smile of accomplishment,
The illusion of a Greek necessity

Flows in the scrolls of her toga,
Her bare

Feet seem to be saying:
We have come so far, it is over.

Each dead child coiled, a white serpent,
One at each little

Pitcher of milk, now empty.
She has folded

Them back into her body as petals
Of a rose close when the garden

Stiffens and odors bleed
From the sweet, deep throats of the night flower.

The moon has nothing to be sad about,
Staring from her hood of bone.

She is used to this sort of thing.
Her blacks crackle and drag. 
 
 
 
 
 
 

 
 
 

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  • perfectsunset gold member
    November 9
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    WOW.

    I am in utter awe right now
    at the majesty of your words.
    My goodness gracious this
    was impeccable!!!

    You are so very beautiful
    and brilliantly inspired
    by Sylvia and many other
    poets I've noticed.

    Your language exceeds many.
    Loved the comparison to Sanskrit.

    And the photo is gorgeous~
    mind if I use it for inspiration?

    I see a gold in this contest
    for you for sure.

    xx


  • DogFish silver member
    November 8
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    Now there's a poem for November!!!


  • I love this picture, and the write is absolutely amazing. You did a wonderful job on this and I really loved it. Keep up the great writing and good luck in your contest hun!


  • Amera gold member
    November 8
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    Love this read and it's worth several re-reads. Like Sylvia you have written volumes in each short stanza. Sylvia makes a statement creating an image then desolves the image with an emotion; you have captured that perfectly. Bravo!

    Love,
    Amera♥

  • Rowan gold member
    November 8
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    I know you must be tired of my usual comment, but you really are amazing hon.


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    November 8
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    "Her florid feet have stopped dancing,
    grown weary of rhythm."


    your voice is soft in this, gentle, subtle and really quite beautiful. i enjoyed this.


    laura.

    • Night Hope gold member
      November 8
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      Thank you for hosting and for your kind comment, Laura. I appreciate your efforts in this and know well what it requires, as I've hosted quite a few myself, especially recently. I've read most of the entries and don't envy your task in the least. As I told someone in my reply below, I've been writing more "tribute" poems recently (for lack of a better word). I've done a few for Sylvia, several for Anne Sexton, one for Edna St. Vincent Millay and a bunch for Emily Dickinson. All are on my "inspired by famous people" list. One of my own favorites is this one:

      "Bouquet: for Sylvia"

      www.allpoetry.com/poem/5662665

  • aychellus gold member
    November 8
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    beautiful eloquence in deep sadness, this is fine indeed! a fine homage with just the right amount of ache. well written as always!


  • heartnsoul
    November 8
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    Bravo!

    Your work is outstanding! So wonderfully, beautifully dark. What I think one would find chilling is that you wrote in Plath's voice with "chilling" accuracy. At the same time I can feel the undertones of the "City of Angels" being the driving force. What a fantastic combination! Stunning eloquence! This is a poem that leaves you not only with the words stuck in your head but the feeling enveloping you as you move through your day. Kind of like waking from a dream you can't remember but the feeling of it is stuck with you through out the day. Your last line is an exquisite ending! I haven't read the other works from the contest, but I dare say you have given others a run for their money! Much good luck to you
    ~Michelle~

  • Amazing!

    This is beyond anything else I have viewed of yours. Beautiful and chilling to the core, at the same time! Just wonderful!

    A. L. O'Prunty

    • Night Hope gold member
      November 8
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      Thank you very much. I appreciate your thoughtful words. I've been writing more "tribute" poems recently (for lack of a better word). I've done a few for Sylvia, several for Anne Sexton, one for Edna St. Vincent Millay and a bunch for Emily Dickinson. All are on my "inspired by famous people" list. One of my own favorites is this one:

      "Bouquet: for Sylvia"

      www.allpoetry.com/poem/5662665

  • Bad Bill
    November 8
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    A subtly beautiful, and quite chilling, poem. You have taken the essence of Plath's style and meaning and fashioned it into something indubitably your own. Excellent!

    In admiration,
    Bill

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