Last night, I saw a monster.
First it was just a shadow
By degrees it became clearer and clearer
Finally it stood out
Clear as clear can be.
Handless it was, really handless
With a shock I knew
That it was legless too
Yet, it was standing straighter that straight
In lieu of a head, all it had
Was an eye unconnected with its body
A most grotesque figure indeed
I was floored, was rolling on all fours
Thought the monster had me down
My eye shutters were shut tight
And a great struggle I undergone opening them
No sooner the shutters fell open
The monster had vanished
In its place I saw an ‘ i ’
In the book that had me sleep awhile.
2004
(I wrote this poem when I was in 3rd standard. When I was studying my lessons, I had this ‘ i ’ monster trapped in my mind)
Author notes
I wrote this when I was 7 and edited it after a while....
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This is a wonderfully fun, imaginative poem. The description of the monster is revealed as a riddle in the surprise ending.
(To keep it a surprise, I would remove "(i)" from the title.)
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Demonstrated Diversity
A diamond's beauty is best seen through many facets.
Howard
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Very interesting poem. Vivid imagination, you have.
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Quite an (i) opener from one so young...no, that's not true, poets are born not made...you are indeed a poet age is not important, talent is!
Welcome!
John
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Very vivid.
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Beautiful.
That was a beautiful poem. You are quite talented. Lines 6-12 really got my attention. I love to read poems and this one amazed me. Keep on writing and never give up! -
(i) have a monster like that too, the monster is me. This is a good story line and well written.
BUddy
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cool work i could see the monster and enjoyed the poem have a happy day glenn
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Oh wow, this was cute. You really do well writing about different things. I really like the way you write hun and I want to say keep up the great writing.
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oh man! this was so clever and cute =3
and well written as well!
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Very nice description of the monster and use of words. This was intriguing to see what kind of monster it was and to find out what happened with it. The ending was surprising which I like alot. Good luck and keep penning.
Hugs,
Sam I Am
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You have the heart of a poet. This poem is captivating. You are an amazing storyteller
Love,
Amera
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welcome to allpoetry
that was wonderfully done! I enjoyed the imagrey of it, the "i" monster,, that is very original,thanks so much for sharing this with us here and for joining the site, please keep up the writing,
cheers
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great poem
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