The entire world is a marketplace
Of infinite size it is
Filled with enchanting things
Both on Earth and in the heavens
One could flit from thing to thing
Like a butterfly in the bush
All things are so colourful
One’s at a loss as to what to buy
From a grain of sand to the stars
All things are fascinating
Bewitchingly beautiful, enthralling
What to buy and take home is the question
Man is taken in by them all
He’s made softer and softer with desire
One should be wary of this enchantment
Lest it melts down man to nothingness
I think I know what to do now
Leave things untouched, leave them pure
Use things only to live and let live
Wanton consumption will consume all
Let everything remain untouched, unblemished
We don’t own anything
In truth we are owned by Nature
Bonded to her as children to mother.
21st September 2008.
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I wrote this when I was 11 and didn't edit it except the grammar. It would be helpful if you could edit any mistakes and give your views and tips 
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Nice
Its natural beauty is, perhaps, best left untouched to be appreciated for what is. Often, innocence does not mature well. Howard
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Beautifully expressed
.... and of course you are right. I especially love the last two lines. They sum up your sentiments admirably. let us hope that Mother is kind to us!
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Very Good
12 years of age or not, its a good poem. With a nice ending.
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Wow, this is very deep and thoughtful for a 12 year old. I'm very impressed. You show good form and maintain your rhythm throughout. Nicely done.
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have to admit when you asked me to read your poetry...I was expecting something juvenile but this is actually really wise and well written. impressive.
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This is really a wonderful poem.
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Yes. I agree with this poem. I also think it was well written. Be well.
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You are right on target here. Whn we consume just to consume it is an awful waste. You are right we will consume ourselves out of a home.
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You really have a big vocabulary for someone who is only 12. You are an excellent writer and I think you will just continue to get better and better. You've done wonderful here. Keep up the great writing.
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oh this is beautiful. so truthful, kind, said so tenderly.
you speak so boldly and truthful for one who is so young =]
♥Blackrabit.
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Very nicely written, the greed in mankind is bewitching and beseiging indeed. I hope you contiune your poetry
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Your perception of mankind's greed, along with a desire to leave things pure, is very beautiful.
A wonderful poem.
Very well done.
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I really like what you have written here. So very true. I really enjoyed this part:
Let everything remain untouched, unblemished
We don’t own anything
In truth we are owned by Nature
Bonded to her as children to mother.
Very good with imagery and feelings.
Good luck and take care.
Sam I Am
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thats beautiful
i cant even describe it
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Consume or Not to Consume
good title
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