Although the dark has been my friend for years,
I'm finding little comfort here tonight,
Afraid the dawn will show me all my fears
In its excessive, unforgiving light.
I fear it will confirm the things I think;
That you're corrupted and controlled by her.
At but the thought my heart begins to sink
And dream and long for all the ways things were.
I've borne the stigmata of witchery
For years now even though it was a lie.
And now I must endure this treachery?
Now even you believe it? Tell me why!
I know. It's clearer now. Yes... It is she
The one with sunny face and golden hair,
The one the world will say it couldn't be,
The world is cold and heartless and unfair
For truly, though it's I who's skin is pale,
And hair is dark, don't judge me at first glance;
Look closer, watch her, penetrate the veil
Of lies. Her so called kindness may entrance,
But this is just her web with which she'll trap
And wrap you up and grinning sickly, spew
Her venom on your flesh. And then she'll sap
Away your soul. She will devour you.
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Golden hair is overrated.
Quite the kick-ass piece, stranger (says one pale one to another). That may not be the most literary critique ever, but it's what I thought after reading it.
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Good work. Love the first two stanzas especially. The last three lines are perhaps the most powerful, a fitting end to a piece with attitude.
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This so very much reminds me of some people I know: butter won't melt in their mouths, and everyone swears how perfect kind and wonderful they are, yet they can spread rumors so cleverly while avoiding slander outright, by a raised eyebrow or a single leary glance.
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Thank you so much my friend. I've had the most unbelievable weekend. It's absolutely maddening.
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I thought this was very good. When watching the TV soaps it is very often the angelic looking female who turns out to be the b..ch or evil person. Mills and Boon romances years ago always had a blond heroine and a evil dark haired woman. The hero of course could be blond or dark .. I digress
I thought your rhyme and meter were good. I did have a hiccup with
''Ive borne the stigmata of witchery' until I pronounced it stig-ma-ta with stress on the ma.
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It reads fine to me;
I've BORNE the STIGmaTA of WITCHerY
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