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Rainbow



i am the spectrum
a bent arm submerged in grey
dipped in rain and gold



Author notes

hm. a haiku. i tried not to use the "stretched" word. or "sky." i think the syllable counts are right... i get confused with the "ed" words. : )

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  • Swan song gold member
    1 day ago
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    awesome poem !!! i missed this one the first time around but this is good and clever in delivery

  • ailill
    2 days ago
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    I like this idea for a haiku.. it provokes good imagery within my imagination.. Hmmm.. I think I get what you are saying.. colors juxtaposed against the background of a rain cloud disappearing in the horizon.. still.. if I was writing this.. I might contemplate a better way of saying 'submerged in grey,' Then again.. Hmmm.. It is good this way too..


  • Babies Blues
    November 15
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    I like this...


  • chinmay
    November 8
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    Wonderful imagery and well penned. All the best in the contest.


  • DogFish silver member
    November 8
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    i am the spectrum
    a bent arm submerged in grey
    dipped in rain and gold

    in summer's most mighty hour
    my arm defies heavens fury


  • solarjinx
    November 8
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    I don't know what the hell a haiku is, but I freaking love this little thing you wrote. I called it a "little thing" because you called it a haiku and I want to call it a poem, therefore I found some middle ground.

    Either way, it's a marinade of minimal words that simmer and cook to create a terrific taste, I love it.

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