We retrace our waltz on the lonely sidewalk
where the shattered streetlamp fails to compete with the moon;
our footsteps follow the silent composition of Schubert
as we become the echo-less melody of a forgotten symphony.
Shadows coward under winter's nonchalant stares,
and even Selene wanes as the last leaf goes to sleep.
Outside the frosted café window, our eyes eagerly
search for falling stars, but our tongues touch not snowflakes,
but mere raindrops as the clouds drape over Diana;
in her absence, we stumble through the evergreen.
Author notes
prompt: a jealous moon
A contest entry
- Prewrites by Diminished Capacity.
1200 points, ended November 15, 38 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Suggestions?
Comments
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You have some awesome imagery in this. This piece is brilliant beyond words. This makes me want to read more writes from you. Thank you so much for entering my contest.
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Your description is superb in this. I feel a touch of romance even though some of your words lead to a more lonely feeling. I love the wave of emotions I get when I read this from beginning to end.
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Very beautiful. Great job.
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Your first stanza, powerfully provocative to the image-maker in my head.
Did you mean shows cower or shadow's coward? I stumbled on that.
I love the symbolism in the evergreen...the knowing that they are there, although we may not see them. Nicely done!
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you curl my toes
and I have become that jealous moon to your stars -shine
golden this is
mal
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Excellent
You accepted the prompt and made it a grand presentation. I think this is an exceptional piece poet.
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This is beautiful, soft and mellow ... and a fine take on the prompt.
All the best in the contest
Sue
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This is really lovely, so soft and gentle.
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Ah! Draping over Diana... stumbling voer that which is here instead of what is expected. Sidewalks and evergreens... quite the contrast... appropriate I think. Great take on the prompt.
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Breathtaking
This was amazing, the word choice was fantastic. Your imagery was beautiful, it makes me feel as if I was there, in the moment. I really hope you win in the contest, you deserve it with such a wonderful poem.
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Beauty-full, Sweetie. Good luck in Carol's contest. 
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