Looking up, I can see the sky falling
down upon us all, without stalling --
how can this be?
Is this reality,
or just an illusion?
A wise man said there is a reason
to everything, a time and season ~
it evades me,
but, surely God knows
what the future's to be...
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Looking beyond,
farther than the mind's eye sees,
an overwhelming sea
of madness and memories...
♫
Bowing to demigods and dieties,
be it Jesus, or Mephistopholes
or various other entities --
separate them for me, please?
Amazing Grace, or rock and roll?
Which will rise to fill my soul
with that missing part to make me whole?
I surely hope that God is in control...
♫
I can still remember when
God was King, but that was then...
Some how we had lost our way
and sought other lights of day --
and now the world is in decay...
It's a wonder that God
doesn't open the heavens
and flood the earth again.
The time is now, Revelation!
People, cry out for salvation --
and forget your reputation,
for, surely that won't save you ~
all are equal when it comes to death.
♫
O Jehovah in the highest,
Thou art Holy, art Thou biased?
In this land, gods are aplenty ~
it's easy to see how we forgot Thee...
Please give us time to make things right
before You come, a thief in the night.
♫
Still, many will die, singing
their boring, same old song ~
they rely on themselves,
so, really, can they be wrong?
Woe is me?
Can't you see that your
gods will burn in the fiery sea?
Can't you see?
A travesty, that vanity
and arrogance will end humanity.
Author notes
No prompt, just had this idea going through my head
and let the words & melody take over.
These are lyrics I wrote,
using the music of "Mozart and Memories" by Trans-Siberian Ochestra
(from Night Castle, 2009)
http://www.rhapsody.com/goto?rcid=tra.30507816&artistId=art.16049
[which is mostly "Mozart and Madness" by Savatage,
from "Dead Winter Dead," 1995,
http://www.rhapsody.com/goto?rcid=tra.25468520&artistId=art.2113 ]
♫ = different movements within the piece, creating different tempos and moods.
Lyrics fit over the base melody, not including intro and closing bars & segments in between the stanzas.
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Comments
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this was fantastic.
amazing.
i loved it,
and it's rare to see these type of writes on here.
great job and good to see you've entered this.
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WAW! What a great poem...
Still, many will die, singing
their boring, same old song ~
they rely on themselves,
so, really, can they be wrong?
I am VERY keen on these lines...Food for thought
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that was a great write. i love the feeling and diversity in this write
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Thank you
I appreciate your comment!
It was definitely a challenge, but one I enjoyed.
~ Tim
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I sit in Awe! "I can still remember when God was King, but that was then... Some how we had lost our way and sought other lights of day -- and now the world is in decay...It's a wonder that God doesn't open the heavens and flood the earth again." I couldn't agree more. And yes I do agree that arrogance and vanity will end humanity. People do not see that they are driving the world straight into hell. God is coming and Christians need to be about the Father's business and spread His word and be out and about trying to win souls to the Lord before its too late. This piece is absolutely wonderful. I am definitely saving this one!! You are a truly talented writer. You have my attention. I am now going to read more of your stuff and keep checking back.
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You humble me with this comment! Wow...
When I set out to do this piece, there was no pre-conceived plan of what was going to be said, what the message was, if there was a message? I played the music over and over, piece by piece, and these are the words that came thru.
Intercession? Revelation? I don't know, but when this was done, even I sat back and was drop-jawed. There is an old Kim Hill song, God works in Mysterious Ways.
Thank you, again, for this amazing read into this piece.
~ Tim
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A Great Piece
Great Poem, I really enjoyed the tone you struck with regards to religion. It is really beautiful piece.
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Thank you
I believe in faith ~ even God hates religion!
I'm glad that you enjoyed this piece, it was a pleasure to write!
~ Tim
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I have read this 4 times now and am in awe everytime i read!
This was blessed by God i know it was Tim.
I am so amazed at the gift God has given you and these are my favorite writes you do!
You are His quill in this beautiful yet thought provoking poetry.
Well done my friend,
always,
~Lisa~
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Thank you, Lisa
I know, you always encouraged the spiritual writes
The more I read this, myself, the more I see each segment as different people, different voices, and their thoughts, and then the Church or God's messengers warning people to get ready.
This was totally not my idea, as the words took over. I started out with "Looking up, I can see the sky falling" ~ next thing I knew, it was about the end of the world. I can only imagine what John felt when he viewed Revelation, first hand!
sss
~ Tim
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This was a great write. Lyrics are a miracle. The idea of using a music note for different beats and tempos was a brilliant idea. I never thought of that.
Thanks for sharing this piece.
This was my favorite stanza:
Still, many will die, singing
their boring, same old song ~
they rely on themselves,
so, really, can they be wrong?
Rock On
•*~♥Dax♥~*•
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Thank you, Dax!
I enjoy the challenge of lyrics ~ not that they are hard, but they are actually quite easy to make cheesy (that was an unintentional rhyme)...I never took on a piece like this, with its' Mozart score ~ it was something I just wanted to see if I could do.
I'm glad you enjoyed this, and thank you for letting me know which part stood out to you! I find it interesting which parts people are drawn to.
~ Tim
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This is amazing. The music notes to denote music changes was a good idea.
Amazing Grace, or rock and roll?
Which will rise to fill my soul
with that missing part to make me whole?
I surely hope that God is in control
my favorite part ^_^ I am a total music lover so "missing part to make me whole" really reached me.
Beautiful words and I absolutely loved it
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Thank you
I'm glad that you enjoyed the piece! Thank you for letting me know which section stood out to you, I appreciate that also.
~ Tim
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Superb
Fine work here. I connected with the message and heart of the poem. So many lines that stood out but this one really caught my eye...
"Bowing to demigods and dieties,
be it Jesus, or Mephistopholes
or various other entities --
separate them for me, please?"
Loved that. You spoke to the concept of oneness, how we've lost our way from source and revolution, all things I wrestle with in my own consciousness as well. I would love to hear this as a song. Great write sorcerer!
Thank you for sharing.
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Creatress
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I'm hardly a sorcerer, but thank you for your wonderful comments! The music that inspired these lyrics is already out ~ Trans-Siberian Orchestra, "Mozart & Memories" on the CD Night Castle. As much as I would love to have this sung, I don't think I'd have permission...
Thank you, also, for letting me know which part you connected with. I really appreciate that!
~ Tim
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that is so amazing. you r really goo
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Thank you!
~ Tim
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This is an excellent poem. I love the separation of stanzas by music notes, and the fact that they were intended to indicate changes in the music of it.
O Jehovah in the highest,
Thou art Holy, art Thou biased?
was brilliant. The flows of the poem are ever-graceful, and the rhyme schemes are ever-well-done...The words are, frankly, beautiful. This was an amazing write, I'm very glad I came by to read it.
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Thank you!
I greatly appreciate your comments! The compliments humble me...
I'm really glad that you enjoyed this piece.
~ Tim
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Superb Plus +
Ah, 'tis a fine write, indeed, me friend! As usual you have expressed your thoughts with great clarity. I also enjoyed the wry humor in this poem. Thanks for sharing this one with us. -
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Clovis! Thank you!
I'm really glad that you enjoyed this & really appreciate your comments!
~ Tim
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This was an amazing piece, I honestly don't know how I could possibly pick a favorite part because I would put the whole poem in here, I like how you let the music guide you thats also really amazing, great piece
Tonja
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Thank you, Tonja
My start came with lyrics, but I usually write before there is music...I'm working on getting back into songwriting, so this was a good workout, seeing how I could write for previously written music.
I'm glad you enjoyed the piece!
~ Tim
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Great lyrics to go with the strong music. You touch on so many things here that I can't find a "most liked" part. I love the whole thing. Good write Tim, keep penning and sharing.
Sharon
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Hi Sharon, thank you!
It is a strong piece of music ~ based around Mozart! That, alone, is a challenge for TSO as musicians ~ so to write lyrics that compliment this and have them appreciated by others? That is so worth it, a great encouragement.
~ Tim
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you missed just one teenie, tiny, little detail (one that I've missed more than I'd like to admit)- you forgot to enter it in the contest!
I originally titled my entry "Madness and Promises", but then I saw your title (we must be of similar minds), so I changed mine...
you did a good job with their simple, cliche lyrics (they really should hire a poet) I see you poem has a message- confusion, multi-religions, moral decay, then a return to religion...
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Thank you!
The music I laid this over is an instrumental, so...I went with what I was feeling as I listened. As I mention in comments below, I had no idea where the message was going!
Just went there. On a side note, for me it's a matter of faith ~ religion is merely a system of good works hoping to get God's attention...
As for the contest, no ~
I entered a different one in that contest! "Into Tomorrow."
Thanks again, I'm glad you enjoyed the read!
~ Tim
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of a prophetic nature, beautifully written...
I love this stanza:
The time is now, Revelation!
People, cry out for salvation --
and forget your reputation,
for, surely that won't save you ~
all are equal when it comes to death.
This is a brilliant piece, Xianaria.
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Thank you, Debbie
I let the words "write themselves" ~ I literally went measure for measure with the music, not knowing where this was going to end. A sense of irony: the music behind the stanza you chose is the softest section in the song, yet I heard those words come thru.
~ Tim
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wow Tim.
I am so blown away, this is so spirit filled
the words so ministered to my spirit,sss
thank you so much for this...
I am truly blessed for reading this!
love and blessings
Rend
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Thank you, Rend
When this started, I had no idea what the outcome was going to be... As each stanza advanced, more and more it became a call to repentance & salvation.
It touches me that you were truly blessed.
Love & blessings,
~ Tim
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