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Companion in This Battle

Her support helped me fight
Though I soon lost
Im stronger than I would have been
If I had lost her too

She helped me push back Ana's voice
During the longest of fights
Without her I wouldn't be here
Anorexia would have taken my life

When the voices told me I wasn't beautiful
My best friend was there to reveal their lies
Though I felt the voices were the truth
I appreciate her attmpted tries

I still struggle today
But with her by my side
Ana is only a voice
Hiding in my mind

If it weren't for her support
I would have given in
But with her there to worry
I couldn't do that to my friend

So I fought harder
trying to make my best friend happy
Though the voices in my head were stronger
My friend never left me

Author notes

ehh....its ok. My best friend helped me, and is still helping me, conquer my ED. I would have been lost without her.

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  • a-girl-from-ashes
    November 8
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    friends are nice


  • Ginger Woods
    November 7

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    Needs work

    First off, you need a title. I don't care what it is, bring something from your poem to your title. Also after the last line on three stanza's you numbered the stanza's which is not needed. You could put some punctuation in there, but that's optional.

    I need more detail, what were you fighting? How did you lose? How could you have lost her trust? Who is Ana, what did Ana do? If you lost then the whole rest of the poem makes no sense, because according to the rest of the poem, you didn’t lose because this certain person helped you. By the way who is this certain person? Poetry is about emotion, and detail. I need to see what's going on, how does Ana make you feel? I want to see the pain Ana puts you through, I want to see how this other person helps you. SHOW don't tell me, and more detail. I need more emotion, more detail, and more imagery. You have a great start, now make it even better!

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