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Peacock 3




a peacock fans
his wonderful plumage
in mating season




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  • Swan song gold member
    November 21
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    again fans is used and is strong but I wonder about the use of the word wonderful
    because if one reads a poem or sees a peacock they should notice color
    The many eyes of Argus in the plumage which i know haiku does not really lend itself to mythology but color is a big thing They also have a cry that is loud and longing