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The Last Fall I Rose...

Slamming of doors, again.
A sound that's been repeated .
So many times , hearing goodbye .
Over , and over again.
Holding my breath,
for tires to screech.

Screeching to another end.

Your always leaving me.

I'm not good enough.

I didn't make the bed.

The eggs weren't quite right.

Alone ,

you say that's how I'll be.

Because,

you can make it without me. 

I hear a door close,

and jingle of keys landing in the mailbox.

On my way out I pluck the last fall rose.

A symbol , a sign ...

"This is me letting you go." 

 

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prompt " This is me letting you go "

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  • SapereAude11
    2 days ago
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    Nice take on the prompt... you took a little bit of a different take. Rather than moving on, it's a goodbye.

    Very sad and honest... I feel exactly what the main character is going through. Good job


  • IrishGypsyRose silver member
    November 7

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    Oh...I so hope you are just writing the prompt...don't ever let him/her think you are not good enough. Good job with the prompt. I really do like the rose metaphor. I enjoyed this read and wish you the best of luck in this contest. Thank you for entering. ~gypsy~

  • Well I can understand that how painful is when you are alone and lost the love of the heart..a heartfelt and touching story of the love you described..well done..