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War Cry

The thrill of laying our life on the line
our gods and goddesses with us
a taste for victory that's divine
we charge into battle with out end
were afraid because were human
there's no need to pretend
 
Rushing to meet our deaths
swords and shields at hand
crying out our last breaths
there's no way we'll stop now
not til we've won this battle
we've made our vow

Come forward you coward
finally standing up for ourselves
watching the blood being showered
inspiration coursing threw our veins
no longer bounded by you
not held by your chains

We can smell your fear
stronger than ours
but for you we won't shed a tear
this is your end as we smite your leader
as we free our people
your not a mind reader

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  • Dark-Ecanus27
    November 8

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    random, but very well writin. i enjoyed reading this and hope to read much much more you discribed this beautifuly.


  • xxuglyducklingxx
    November 7

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    Epitome of perfect penning.

    Wow. I cannot find praise adequate enough to express the beauty of a talent and composition like this. You've got a serious talent. This was gorgeous. I really loved the imagery here. It birthed a metaphor through inspired emotions and rubbed raw the walls that hide the truths most don't dare to say. I was really impressed. I love the flow of this, it laces the tone and the rounded "envy" perfectly. Brava on a great write. Keep writing. :=3.

    • Seraph Avalon
      November 7
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      -hugs you- Oh my, thanks. I can't believe this. Your too kind. The inspiration came from a video I saw on youtube for a new game called Dragon Age that came out. The music was by 30 Seconds to Mars and it was called "This is war" It's really awe inspiring! Here http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GmYfRt-hGpI

      • xxuglyducklingxx
        November 7
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        *Huggles you*

        Aww. You are welcome. But, you don't have to thank me, all I did was tell the truth!!!!! ! You might not be able to believe it, but it's the truth. I'm usually pretty harsh on people, but since I've been on AP, I have found talents that far surpass anything I could have imagined being "Poetic Perfection". You, my new friend, define it. ! I can see how that inspired you, you wrote an awe inspiring piece. Keep up the amazing work, Annika. (Avalon)

        • Seraph Avalon
          November 7

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          :giggle: Your awesome to! Isn't that the shit though?!! I wish i could afford the game just to listen to the song x3


          • xxuglyducklingxx
            November 7
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            *Oogles*

            Thank you for the generous compliment. It tis' to quote you :the shit:!!!! :3.

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