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i am not lost; nor found

You discovered me when I was nothing-
just a faceless figure that moved involuntarily among hoards of people that resembled ants in a colony.
Scurrying about, focused on themselves and their insignificant purpose in life. You glanced up from your Hurley baseball cap, and grabbed my attention.


I noticed the barbed wire tattoo around your forearm.
It somehow made your muscles appear larger.


My weakness.----> Your broad chest and thick appendages.
But you made me feel alive.

My lack of eye shine and increased dependence was unattractive but baby, let's face it, this was never a romance anyway. It was a union of convenience for myself.
You weren't what I was looking for, in fact you probably weren't what anyone was looking for.

It only took me seven long months to discover that no one ever finds Cinderellas glass slipper and regardless of how many planet names I memorize, I will only recognize one.

One life is all I will ever have.
So regardless of how many 'ireallyneedyous' I hear, my answer is still the same.
“This is me, letting you go.”

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  • mcfreeman
    November 8
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    glass slippers...and glass hearts

    lost and broken things...


  • Cup-a-Joe
    November 8

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    ~~I noticed the barbed wire tattoo around your forearm.
    It somehow made your muscles appear larger.~~
    Maybe i need a tat? lol
    ~~It only took me seven long months to discover that no one ever finds Cinderellas glass slipper and regardless of how many planet names I memorize, I will only recognize one.~~

    Some times it's just two stars passing in the night. You know?

    I like this as it is, cause you just let it out. No fancy words or lingering
    intuindoes.

    Joe


  • Nom de Plume
    November 8

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    I dont think anyone is what your first line describes...like this, full of strength and independence... realisation as well... definitely one to chew on


  • JinSays gold member
    November 7

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    sigh.


    yep.

    love,
    jin


  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    November 7

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    Beautifully poignant..letting go is so very hard..doo we ever actually let go???,,i ponder this thought all the time..when I think everything is finally over, the silence at night yells loudly in my head and [[poof]] back again in my life even though I live alone
    Brilliant Job..from brevity to this..my mind is a blur
    Bravo on the great penning..wish you the best..love..David


    • Girl-Interrupted gold member
      November 8

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      lol...so i blurred your mind? is that a good thing or bad thing david? thanksss so much for reading!

  • JToddUnderhill
    November 7

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    Sad....

    .... when you realize that there is time for a change like this top happen in your life, but also wise at the same time, I am hoping for quick healing for you both and enjoyed the read on this one.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    November 7

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    ok you've switched gears..

    on me again..just when i was starting to get your new direction with brevity..you go and completely FILL MY MIND'S PALETTE with a full course mental feast.. wow, this is powerful baby..absolutely deep and profound..i had no choice but to taken totally by this amazingly in depth write..


    • Girl-Interrupted gold member
      November 7
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      i know....i simply write the way i feel at the time. im unpredictable....got ya... lol.......


  • condor gold member
    November 7

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    A very deep poem that speaks about someone who really has chosen their independence and not about to let it go. It also sounds like someone who has been hurt a lot and won't allow it to happen again. I love how you spun this tale around and gave it so much character that was like a little movie to the minds eye.

    You discovered me when I was nothing-
    just a faceless figure that moved involuntarily among hoards of people that resembled ants in a colony.

    I really liked those lines here. They spoke heaps about someone who really didn't see too much in themselves, who felt unworthy or unattractive to others. That's a shame to feel that. A beautiful write full of a lot of feeling that certainly came out in the words. Thak oyu for sharing.

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