Last night I saw a world
Without any tears.
No guns, no War.
And the children had no fears.
Last night I saw a world
Without racism or hate.
No one was superior.
No one chose our fate.
Last night I saw a world
Where evil could not pass.
Where guardian angels at those pearly gates
Watched us through tinted glass.
Last night I saw a world
Where darkness turned to light.
Where the sick were healed. The lame could walk
And the blind regained their sight.
Today I see a world
With far too many tears.
Where evil rules and sick ones die.
(It's been like this for years!)
I don't know what I'll see tomorrow.
But I'll pass my torch to you.
Run. Don't let the flame die out.
The rest is up to you.
A contest entry
- Prewrites. ♥ by GraveyardGoddess.
400 points, ends November 27, 409 entries
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Ok, cheezy poem I know... and I know the last stanza is all out of rhythm. Pretty shit. Sorry!!
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Incredible
well well I must say you did an exsquisite I didn't think you had this type of poetry in you but you came out like a pro and showed me up this is incredible full of rhyme and the stanzas are great even the last one that you seemed to hate even when knocking on heaven's gate this poem will still show alot of meaning and show that we can cantrol out own fate
rofl
i know i know sucky rhyme
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This is really a very good poem
I'm not on my computer and the full stop doesn't work, so each new line is a new sentence
There's a lot of meaning hidden under the surface
Me like
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Awesome work Liv. ^_^
I liked the flow and the rhyme wasn't too forced. The ending summed up the whole poem nicely and this wasn't cheesy at all
Kinda reminded me of a speech or something, like it was being read alloud by someone >.< Overall great work 
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i like this a lot darling, it sums up my views exactly, and its so true!, well done, good write
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My
perhaps your best work yet. And if only...But the sad truth is our world, getting smaller every day, must witness he honest ways of which many are.. Just pure selfishness and evil. I think I shall nominate this for the spotlight if you do not mind. Just excellent poet.
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