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Still Here(rough, unfinished)

There's dust on my crown
When the demons come to surround
Broken down I sit on this throne
Convulsing and trying but I'm still alone
Yeah I'm still here

Crippled by my own reveries
Drowning in flooding memories
Why am I still here?
Why am I still held by fear?

tired and afraid, everything is gray
Nightmares confound me, my soul's on display
In life I'm nervous,like I don't deserve this
Trying but I can't get away from this

Crippled by my own reveries
Drowning in flooding memories
Why can't they disappear?
Why am I still here?

My sanity is slain
Where you always my bane?

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  • Veronica-Armijo
    November 8
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    The first 2 lines are a bit off but other that it's well written.


  • metal4ever
    November 7
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    i thought this was awesome, the lines really flowed well and the rhyming wasnt forced at all, awesome job and keep it up