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spiders in the wine.

and i burn to know your fingers
inside my throat,

in case i forget how violation
feels; every ugly word
reminds me how i nearly
broke-

when i
drank to forget your godforsaken lies,
so sick in my visions.

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my first poem. please comment. [=

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  • Tainted-Faith
    November 9

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    Wow.... What can i say.... haha.
    Well done, amazing for your first go!!!!


  • alexei sedition
    November 7

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    Awesome! This is amazing for being your first. I really like how the beginning just grabs you "and I burn to know your fingers inside my throat," I love the first two stanzas but only like the last one, it could maybe be reworked a little...