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the charming willowing wisp of a fire

i tend the mist
gardening it to shame.
i place tinder strategically around the pit,
wishing it would melt my soul.
i swallow in the smart strands of flame,
wishing i was burnt.
fire
fire
melt
melt
the
the
fire
fire

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  • Jornada
    November 7

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    A concise, lucid treatment of the mysterious, puzzling, often painful world of feelings--carefully-chosen words and phrases project the imagery of a "wisp of a fire," and there is a hypnotic effect in the vertical doubled words at the end. I love the alliteration of "willowing wisp" and "smart strands," and the fire-colored rose background fits well.