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one by all we fall

 

If you can joust with the devil
And smile while that candle burns in temptation's eyes
And be stronger when opposites attract
Then be that mediator of sin
Be that servant of virtue
When to love god is to forgive
Not the betrayal we love And know

With a single kiss

Never preach God to the faithful
Aim your inadequacies at the righteous
And kneel in their flames
For which their hearts sing louder
And for which sake
Their words conscript the wrong actions
In better men than them
The flock of God which is anointed by him alone
Are those sheep that wear the crown for all humanity

Why is it men should fear the devil in disguise
When they have more to lose from the saint inside
Why is it that the shepherd harbours sin
And ill will: in those who favor life over virtue
Which is a lesser truth than the betterment of mankind
the lie we live or the truth we kill


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  • Oh.My.Juliet
    November 9
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    Why is it men should fear the devil in disguise
    When they have more to lose from the saint inside

    Oh gosh! This is BRILLIANT! I love this piece, so amazingly well written! Thanks so much for sharing!

    x


  • spideracer gold member
    November 9
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    ''Your use of the English language is great Too bad you can't spell.'' I had to laugh reading that comment. Quite a thought provoking piece of work you have here, and with awesome emotions and imagery. Twisted in its delivery but quite trueful all the same, and the meaning here is very deep.

  • Macsword
    November 9
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    I agree

    There can be more to fear from a self without direction from God; than from any devil. A solid opening stanza poet. A good message.

    This line: There words conscript the wrong actions

    I believe you wanted "Their" instead of "there"


  • KariiB89
    November 9
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    this was a stunning piece.
    Your imagery was vivid, and the emotion behind it practically slammed me back in my chair.

    i absolutely love it. <3

    Keep it up.

  • oneheartstring
    November 9
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    awesome

    Great question, well posed. my hat is off.


  • morphis78
    November 8
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    Truthful

    Hmmm.....good question


  • lovestinks
    November 7

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    this piece is thought twisting... really gets your mind going. great write. keep penning

  • kirkman
    November 7

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    very good

    Your use of the English language is great Too bad you can't spell.

  • n.e.o.n
    November 7

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    A very thought provoking piece you have penned here. I enjoyed the deeper meanings in this. Nice use of words and I liked the layout. Bravo to you on this.


  • mooniemc
    November 7
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    Wow!
    Moon

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