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Dust

Thank god its all now a distant memory
and the thoughts no longer cloud me
or smudge my vision but I so feel those
words ‘ I wish I could cease to exist
For a few years this was me ,

I felt like a pile of dust
waiting to be blown somewhere else
somewhere I did belong and where
the mirror didn’t lie - I would glance into
glass and had no clue who the person
looking back at me was it certainly
wasn’t me
A knife or tablets were never my consideration
I couldn’t even find the bravery for that
I would just make one wish each night at
bedtime


please don’t let me wake up
please just let me die in my sleep


thank god now that wish wasn’t granted and
even now I feel a little shame at the thought of
It

I'm no longer that pile of dust I'm strong

determined, happy to be alive and if

that black cloud even darkens my door I will

smash it and bash it and kick it in the balls

and send it far away from me

 


 

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Not sure this even qualifies as a poem but the title meant something to me - so here's my contribution

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  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    November 8

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    Bravo Terri! You came through that dark place and are so much stronger now. This screams out from tour poem here. Congratulations on your well deserved trophy
    Gaylene

  • JToddUnderhill
    November 7

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    Wow...

    ..... Poem or not I enjoyed the read. Glad I caught this one indeed! Hope all is well with my poetic sister and look I forward to reading more soon!


  • sinfull
    November 7

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    oh never never wear that shame
    you met you fought you overcame
    wear your victory like a crown
    no never shame or head hung down

    inspiring write... meets the prompt head on . well done =)


    • TerriMac gold member
      November 8

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      Thank you so much I didn't have much faith in it as a write I just literally spewed thoughts out because the prompt brought back a few memories!


  • condor gold member
    November 7

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    I really like this because it speaks of a time in your life when you felt that you weren't really a part of life. This must have been hard when you didn't want to wake up, yet now you are a bubbly happy soul who gives so much pleasure to other people with your delightful writes. I'm use to reading humor from you but it is quite nice to read something such as this. I don't know much about form and such, but to me, this was just right and spoke openly and freely and with strength. Thanks for sharing and the very best in the contest.


    • TerriMac gold member
      November 8
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      Thank you - I dont know about form either was just a stream of consciousness really - and does make a change from the humour


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    November 7

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    I am also glad that you made it through this difficult part of your life and came out stronger for it. I have been in this place and learned that you can fight it and I commend you for having the guts to write this.

    All the best

    Sue

  • reveller silver member
    November 7

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    This, to me, was so emotional (blabbing again) I saw you had catorgorised it as personal and it was terribly painful to read, knowing you felt that way. I was so relieved by the positive ending. Fabulous write Terri, all of it, very gutsy! x


  • fiona8 silver member
    November 7

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    This is a happy sad poem. I would find it difficult to write on this topic. You have done it justice. I like the idea of dust, and being blown somewhere where you did belong. Well done.


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    November 7

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    Thank you for sharing your thoughts in this contest...
    I really am trying to hold onto these words, "and this,too, shall pass..." but...
    Again, I thank you and blessings to you!
    ~Heavenly~

    • TerriMac gold member
      November 8
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      Keeping fighting the fight ! you will win in the end - ;-)


  • mgmc gold member
    November 7

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    I believe it definitely qualifies as a poem and a very good one to boot! Fits the prompt perfectly, feels straight from the heart. Also glad your wish not granted back then!

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