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Dark Claws (Bleeding Wish)

I was thinking that was great
But then as always I was late
You died before we met
That I still regret

 

My wish it was so strong
But like always it went wrong
I was way too far from you
And there was nothing I could do

You were a friend to me
No longer are you here to be
You were the brightest light
In my endless night

All my luck does die
I am left to cry
Sometimes it's getting better
That does not really matter

If I think now it's okay
Life sucks worse the other day
I am caught in darkness' claws
Rips me to bleed with paws

I have no reason here to stay
If luck does never come my way
Yet forever I can't sleep
I won't make my loved ones weep

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  • Firequeen
    November 9

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    Oh very deep and emotional.
    this makes the reader definatley think.
    the last stanza sends it home
    Thank you for sharing your gift
    Keep the ink flowing
    fire


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    November 7

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    Thank you for sharing; this reaches deep
    All the best to you in all your writing endeavors...
    ~Heavenly~

  • thedaveformula
    November 7
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    good

    good flow, very though provoking