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Down the Hill and Around the Corner

Beauty is in the eye of the holder,
you'll understand that when your older,
id never thought id know,
but now i do,
ever since i met you.

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  • RatherImaginative silver member
    November 9

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    This is a very sweet piece. However, my eyes are distracted by the lack of consistency in the capitalization and punctuation. Your poem would be much improved by including the appropriate apostrophes and capitalizing the "I"s. Otherwise, I like how you incorporate the advice given to the speaker when young, that he/she is now able to appreciate having experienced it. Thanks for entering my contest!


  • Beautiful-N-Broken silver member
    November 8

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    This is a beautiful dedication to someone you love. Your I's should be capitalized, but other than that you did wonderful with this. Major kudos on expressing yourself so well.