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a half-ass poem that is better left untitled

maybe today i will skip the edibles,
knock back my lunch,
and consume history’s breast milk
like it was gifted to me
from the mother’s teat of two twin-white,
wilting hanging-baskets
asleep
atop the hood of their mired hearse.

history is history.
forget her, and leave her the fuck alone.

i will never be allowed to love my words,
but
despite this bruised tongue
she’ll always
remind me of the bitter taste of an
unseen mouth.

pucker up bitch,
and kiss our mother goodnight.

sometimes twelve ounces are not enough
to
finish these damn words
that have already made history,
so circumstance
has decided this should be
the end of another half-ass poem that is
better left untitled.

 

H.L. Peterson (November 2009)

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  • Cinnarry gold member
    November 20
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    on the money Chipper

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    November 19
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    Provocative, punchy, pitiless poetry, a contemporary wreath-knot of what was, what was not and the ashes of what is.

    Perhaps history is truly history when it is no longer part of the present "tense"


    This is as deep a dive as your other poetry H.

    • A Prophet of 3 gold member
      November 19
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      your comments are as brilliant as your poetry, thank you for seeing my words as they are ... much respect.


  • Dalaney gold member
    November 18
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    You will never be 'allowed' to love your words...
    I don't believe this. I doubt there is a person
    on earth who has the power to punish you in
    such a way, unless, of course, you are punishing
    yourself. In that case, it is something you have
    to deal with, and I am sure you will...

    • A Prophet of 3 gold member
      November 19
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      "I doubt there is a person
      on earth who has the power to punish you in
      such a way" ... this shows (oh never mind, it's not worth it) ... thanks for reading


  • Emmyb gold member
    November 9
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    Came back for a 5am second read


  • Odds and Ends
    November 8
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    you put it honestly.

    enough said.

  • Emmyb gold member
    November 8

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    I cannot comment in full as I'm on an iPhone in bed but I want you to know... I've read it and I love it and hate it and think it's really bloody good proph and I agree with all below comments though most don't do it justice. X x

  • Rowan gold member
    November 8
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    angst is palpable, but you do it so well. I liked this.


  • notorious
    November 8
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    DIG this. Infinitely.


  • jantastic
    November 7
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    i will never be allowed to love my words

    stings

    p.s. can i have this dance?


  • redbird
    November 7
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    i dunno, i enjoyed it


  • Edie gold member
    November 7

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    Frankly...I'm just pleased that you wrote something.

    I say it's about bloody time.


    "history is history.
    forget her, and leave her the fuck alone.


    and yeah, I needed to be reminded of this in particular, so, in this aspect, you can consider your write very much a success....for I still tend to beat my head against the wall of history more often than I care to remember.

    Thank you and Cheers.




  • Raining Kisses silver member
    November 7
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    wow this is intriguing...I like it a lot....well crafted
    T


  • Night Hope gold member
    November 7

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    Sigh.

    • A Prophet of 3 gold member
      November 7
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      yeah hun, i thought the same thing *luv ya*

      • Night Hope gold member
        November 7
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        Love you, too, Proph. Just didn't know what to say or how to say it, ya know? Your third stanza in particular tore my heart in two, on behalf of yours. "i will never be allowed to love my words..." How fuckin' tragic that thought is, my Friend. Thus, leaving only my sigh. The rest of us will just have to love 'em for ya, until you find a way to do so yourself.

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