Rainbow molten into an elixir of colours afloat in silver bowl
The heat of a meandering comet lured by gravity
Caused the incandescent verse of the prismatic raindrops
Written on the face of the azure canopy
Or multi shaded candy floss for the cherubs
Dangling on the horizons for them to savours, to melt
Molten it flowed down the brim of the cerulean bowl
Floating as a strange fluid in the vessel
The colours always aloof and estranged in their braided existence
Smile and share tales of the panorama witnessed from their perch
Lovers in rendezvous in rain on the shore, wet and burning
Children playing in the puddles in rainy showers
Peacocks dancing in abandon, frogs hopping in downpours
Ecstasy of farmers, the gardener's glee
The stories of bliss seen and told are endless...
Author notes
http://fantastree.deviantart.com/art/Gravity-s-Rainbow-77903339. This picture is my source of inspiration for this poem, it loked like a bowl of rainbow coloured fluid to me...
A contest entry
- Photo and Title Prompt: "Gravity's Rainbow" by mgmc.
700 points, ended November 22, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Vivid imagery as always in multiple examples! This is a clear strength for you but you are taking the easy route (IMHO) in this poem and not coalescing the imagery into beautiful meaning that fits one verse to the next congruently. Rather this is a beautiful listing of images --- vivid and beautiful but limited. You are capable of much better; I can attest to i t! Thanks for this entry and all the very best!
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good
all your poems are bejewelled with imagery that is more effusive than subtle......makes your poems energetic like hell...this contrast was good...
Lovers in rendezvous in rain on the shore, wet and burning
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The language and colors and imagery.....
wet and burning
Children playing in the puddles
Peacocks dancing in abandon, frogs hopping in downpours
words to think about
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i really like the way you portray the rainbow's colors conversing on all they witness, with wonderful descriptions shared. nicely done.
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