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I Struggle To Break Free...♥

Underneath this hollow skin I hide
My true beauty within
Afraid to show the world who I really am
I let the shadows block my surrounding
Leaving me in utter darkness
I look around in fear
Hoping to find a way to
Break away from this
Endless pain

I hate this hollow body
Whenever I look at myself in the mirror
I see a side of me I never seen before
A side of a demon...

I struggle to break free
Because I know with apart of me
Set free I can try to stretch my wings and
Fly away to where my heart belongs

Now I smile weakly when
I look down in the mirror and
See a little glimpsing light of hope within my eyes

Author notes

Username:[S]ophia moonfair[y]
Picture: http://krimsongraphix.deviantart.com/art/Breaking-Free-105143495
Lines: 21 -22

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Comments

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  • as.phy.xi.ate. silver member
    November 11

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    20 lines of words is the rule and you made that fine, spacing doesn't count. =)

    You took the picture and perfected it in words. lol Great write.

    -Kati


    • sophia moonfairy
      November 11
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      Oh I thought I got like ban or something ^^ I am glad you like the write. I tried my best

      • as.phy.xi.ate. silver member
        November 11
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        I did like it and no lol I'd let you fix it even if it broke rules, usually only losers ban people lol. & like your picture lol Castle Age? =P


  • sgking123 gold member
    November 8

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    another concept

    hollow skin ..wow...you thought this.......how do you go about describing what is hollow skin..i would love to read more from you on this..as it intrigues me...you used hollow body later on..so hollow sking is stand alone...loved the poem for sure


    • sophia moonfairy
      November 8
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      Thank you so much for your kind words and hollow skin means like a tree is. as do the body its hard.


  • Black-Angel-Death
    November 7

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    OMG I LOVE IT SO MUCH XD I wish I was as talented to write such a beautiful masterpiece as that, wow you are so amazing XD

    -Josh


  • KnightOfTheRose gold member
    November 7

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    "I look down in the mirror and
    See a little glimping light of hope within my eyes" I am glad to hear it. Although shouldn't "glimping" be "glimpsing"? Anyway, great job on this and best of luck to you in the contest


    -Steve-

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