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Just Don't Move Me


 

 

They say to bury the past

yet I'm not sure where to dig

the graveyard is already full

 

 

 

 

Don't bring me tomorrow

I'm not ready

Don't take yesterday

part of me is still there

 

 

 

 

 

 

I don't want to see today

the forcast predicted more rain

Just leave me in this moment

 

 

 

 

 

 

I'm too scared to move

Author notes

"Darren Hayes"
Long Ago When Mercury Descended High On The Moon (OPTIONS!!!!) !
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  • Tresimskaslessae
    November 12
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    Short and Sweet

    Some of my best writes are only nine lines, but they are my favorite. People tell me I need to expand, but when you leave space for people to imply the meaning and imagine the ending and to read in between the lines it can mean much more. You did a beautiful job of this with this write.
    They say to bury the past

    yet I'm not sure where to dig

    the graveyard is already full
    I love this part because it is so concise at yet is so vivid and allows the reader to relate and imply. A beautiful write that leaves the reader thinking. what an amazing poet!


  • xxuglyducklingxx
    November 7

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    Heartbreakingly Beautiful.

    Wow. This is fucking amazing. All the nights where it's always 3 am in my heart and I exist off hidden frequencies were captured beyond perfection in this piece. I'm not usually a fan of such simplicity, the shortness threw me, but it could not have been more beautifully done. I'm living in the spaces that hold the words together. Thank you for putting a definition to what I've been trying to make my haven. Brava on a great write. Keep up the good work and thank you for entering my contest. I wish you the best in it. Keep Writing.