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Autumn Walk

 

 

 

 

Sweet smell of wood smoke through forests of pine
clings very tightly to Autumn’s chill breeze,
pale misty sun offers warmth that’s divine
soon Winter brings forth cold air set to freeze.

Manys the bird that is checking his roost,
beasts search for shelter before the first frost,
nature’s sweet harvest will give life a boost
the stores gathered in before all are lost.

Walk with me now as we wend our way home
the glow from the window, welcoming sight,
a warm mug of soup, no more will we roam;
remember our day by soft firelight.

Jack Frost comes a-nipping at our bare toes
let’s snuggle beneath warm downy bed clothes.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Aelten
    November 19
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    Beautiful! Makes me want to wrap up with someone special
    Lovely sonnet.


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      November 21
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      Many thanks for reading and leaving a comment, I appreciate both.

      Sue


  • tanzanite
    November 14
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    Definitely a wonderful piece. The flow is good even though there is one or two places you can make it even better. The last lines of the first two stanzas could use a slight tweak to get the flow perfect. With that being said, you also managed to speak in your own voice and to give life to cliched images so many has written about - well done on this piece.

    Results will be in very shortly and thank you for entering.


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      November 14
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      Thank you for both the comment and the HM in your contest, I appreciate it.

      Sue


  • Amera gold member
    November 8

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    This is truly a beautiful read! I love the feelings you have penned here; the smells, the contrast between cold and warmth. This is an autumn poem that is far beyond an everyday poem. Bravo!

    love,
    Amera♥


  • Bluemonday silver member
    November 7

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    What a lovely thought Sue, but I hate the winter...Poems like this though seem to make it more palpable...lovely...Dan

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      November 9
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      Thanks for reading Dan ... I'll try and make Winter as cheerful as I can as I work my way through the seasons poetically

      Sue
      x


  • arafura gold member
    November 7

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    Brrrr... sounds like good snuggling weather. Here in the southern hemisphere summer is coming fast!

  • sharon duveau
    November 7
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    cozy and yes, you do rhyme very well.


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      November 7
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      Thank you so much for reading and leaving a comment ... so glad you enjoyed it.

      Sue


  • crivanea silver member
    November 7

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    beautiful...i wish i can rhyme like that...the kind of poem that personify autumn..wonderfully done


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      November 7
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      Thank you for such a lovely comment and compliment, I appreciate both.

      Sue


  • Puppydog gold member
    November 7

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    LOVELY!!!!

    Oh how this brings back some wonderful memories. Being out enjoying the wonder of nature and coming home to warmth and hot chocolate and snuggling down under layers of blankets! Very happy memories indeed! 's

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      November 7
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      Many thanks Kevin, I think that's why I love Autumn so much, it's the magic of the season with so much to look forward to as well.

      Sue
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  • Pattiboo silver member
    November 7

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    I don't like this time of year . . but the idea of a bright log fire and snuggling down to keep warm is appealing. Looking into the flames seeing images there ..
    The trouble is as I remember it you were only warm in the area immediately in front of the fire the rest of the room was cold.

    Love the pictures of 2 pairs of feet being toasted

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      November 7
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      Many thanks Pat, in my world I would have central heating and a log fire just for the effect ... I could spend all day staring into the flames and dreaming

      Sue


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    November 7

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    Vivid images, Sue.
    Good luck in that contest.

    Tom

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