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Jealousy



As the smoke wafts from the city chimney spires,
And the sun goes down so red and angrily,
I am tortured by jade green, dark desires,
It is you, beloved you ,that tortures me.
I walk around in yellow chiffon fragments,
I stare out at the city all lit up,
The sky is crimson like my hurt and torment,
I go inside and fill my coffee cup.
Somewhere in the smoky night you wander,
Seeking out the new love you have found.
You walk so fast ,so eager now to see her...
Your wicked feet just barely touch the ground.
I close my eyes and let the torture find me,
An exquisite pain I have learned to bear.
A torture burning brighter than the city,
A haunting cry just hanging in the air.

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  • sgking123
    November 8

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    wow

    simple portrayal of jealousy..or was it mulling the acts of betrayal...jealousy is when you know the object being sought..anyway that was my reading...nut iloved the poem as it is..visit me and comment me


  • hershey101
    November 7

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    Somewhere in the smoky night you wander,
    Seeking out the new love you have found.
    You walk so fast ,so eager now to see her...
    Your wicked feet just barely touch the ground.
    I close my eyes and let the torture find me,
    An exquisite pain I have learned to bear.
    A torture burning brighter than the city,
    A haunting cry just hanging in the air.

    I like it very much its kinda describe me alittle bit but great write thanks for entering and Good luck!