time together

cool breeze invisible
caressing skin.
mild flutter of leaves
piercing darts
I crave for fervor.

night fire drives away cold
but warm within.
I am longing
for this winter,
a touch, that lures me
into web of belonging .

thoughts weaving
good tidings,
I live in hope's shelter.

Author notes

Prompt: prelude to winter

A contest entry

Prompt 121 by crivanea. 700 points, ended November 10, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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crivanea
November 10

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i have quite a mix feeling about this piece..the words you choice are def. unique..i love the last stanza..but i adore the simplicity you choice for the poem's tone..

Rubric:

creativity: 4/5
imagery: 5/5
diction: 4/5
impact: 7/10

Total: 20/25
Macsword
November 8
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A very fine piece Poet
Yes. I think winter is the time to seek touch, and the warmth of another.