Turning from the hall I am comforted
by neatly-folded paper beneath a rose.
I missed out terribly all day, having
considered your indifference-
which is now a smirk of candlelight
which outshines my insecurity
and reddens my cheeks.
Taming the real and unreal
has a slippery instinct-
and as loud as my sand-buried attention yelled,
I sought the romance of stars in your eyes,
only to find love had already trained your pen.
Speechless, as you recreate my confidence
with sensual words while I rustle
flowers behind my back.
Author notes
Prompt: "All in the knowing of Love"
Word bank: Love, pen , paper, roses, candlelight, romance, and sensual.
A contest entry
- ~All in the Knowing of Love... by Nature Song.
675 points, ended November 20, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Ah sorry, forgot the clappies...early morning here
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Very well written...I liked how you wrote: "rustled flowers behind my back".
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This is beautiful and makes me just want to hug and kiss you. Ok, I know, I'm a sucker for love poems.
Love,
Amera♥
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Beautiful in it's romantic imagery. The right words can so soothe the stumbles in our lives. You used the word bank very well and created a tender read.
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Steve...this is a really cleverly sculpted little piece of art...you blend your words with such skill...everything drips from the tongue...and the last verse provides perfect closure...this was truly a delight to the word junkies senses...thanks
T
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You did admirably well with the selection of words given. I really enjoy your poetry. It has a unique flavour to it and is always intriguig. Rose
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Lovely addition to my contest! Bravo!! A folded note, flowers bedind your back. But it is her words with the pen that make on speechless. Impressive write for sure. Thank you for entering.
Please do not reply back...
~Sie
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Thanks for the placement. It was a pleasure writing for your contest.
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Impromptu love
How lovely, if I interpret right, to find an unexpected love note! That will always brighten a dull day (and if I'm wrong, I don't want to know). This is such a romantic expression. Impromptu love, I'll call it, and the "neatly-folded paper beneath a rose" is as sweet as the flowers behind your back. I like the way you make the reader "swoon" with your words.
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This is really beautiful, and I love the contrast here between insecurity, doubt, and the reality of love that goes beyond romance... deft, light, and yet powerful. What is so wonderful is that you did this with a word bank! Amazing work. Lita
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wow this i beautiful
Good luck in the contest
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Sometimes people take the challenge of a contest and run with it. However, you soared with this. Your poem is so touching.
Love,
Camille
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A very beautiful piece you've penned, Steve. I love all the stanzas, so I can't pick a favorite, but "Taming the real and unreal has a slippery instinct-" I understand all to well. Thank you for allowing this glimpse of your heart. As always I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Ann
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This is simply beautiful
good luck in the contest
Passions
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Humm..what a beautiful scene of the heart there between the lines you created and did a wonder there..love it..very thoghtful work..thanks..
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How beautiful!
Would that someone would write such awesome poetry for me...
Love this!
The best in this contest,
Sandy
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Speechless as you recreate my confidence with soft sensual words...Lovely line to end a wonderful poem! Good luck in my sister's contest!
Tish
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