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She isn't a virgin




She isn't beautiful,
but there is something about her;
draws them in.

Becoming the bride a second time
by age twenty-six, and I
wonder why she is seeking love in eyes
blood-shot

from all-night
drunken stupors;

observe from a distance, placing bets
on how long 'til divorce
is dying to knock on their door.

Contemplate both girls', under six,
innocent,

caught in a whirl-wind of  momma's marrying
a man they don't want to call daddy.

For all my doubts about their future I
offer to make the cake;

four tiers of royal blue, silver, and white.

She isn't a virgin. I always found it odd
that women wed in white
when they've been dipped in the pink
too many damn times to count.

 

 

 

 










 

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  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    November 16
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    I think people like that seek love in those places because they lack any sort of self esteem to seek it anywhere else!!

    Yep.. the white dress thing.. never got it myself! Powerful writing as always Sis!


  • sideways hourglass
    November 11
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    love the intensity here.


  • stasis
    November 10

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    I don't know if I liked the "damn" in the last line. Don't get me wrong, I enjoy poetry with curse words in it [if you count "damn" as a curse word], it just came off as a little awkward to me.
    The rest of this, however, I loved.

    One of the many reasons I'm not getting married and refuse to wear white if I do

    Best of luck in the contest.


  • Annalise
    November 7

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  • crivanea silver member
    November 7

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    that last stanza is abs. stunning the metaphor in it...very nicely done


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    November 7

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    Strong and powerful piece this is...wow!
    So much said in your own creative wording, sweets
    Awesome!
    All the best to you in this contest,
    Sandy

  • Rowan gold member
    November 7

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    oh yeah. Put a cherry on top of it. winks. So good.


  • Ken-Maverick
    November 7

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    This is quite different from your usual writes,
    wonderfully penned buddy!! Well done!
    All the best to you in the contest.

    Ken


  • Cannonsfire
    November 7

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    Wow now I can see all this pan out and understand it....strong writing and yeah I have to wonder about traditions of white the 2nd time around too C

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