Happiness grows and comes to play
but draws back into a dark cage
without compassion mistakes slay
as past comes visiting with rage,
shame halts confession upon page
each day wilts away in torment,
memories locked with merciless image
becomes a life long punishment
Author notes
A Huitain has 8 lines. Each line has 8 syllables only.
Lines 1 and 3 should rhyme
Lines 2,4,5 and 7 should rhyme
Lines 6 and 8 should rhyme
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A deeply touching poem this is and I do like the form
This touches the heart, for sure
Hope all is well with you!
Thank you for sharing and good luck to you!!! -
I like this form it helps bring out the pain you are trying to paint here. Thank you for reading one of my poems that means a lot. SH
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memories locked with merciless image
becomes a life long punishment
sad but lovely poem meena
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