To fall in love
And have it last
Is the sweetest thing
To have to pass
Yet at this time
My love is bound
Sealed away
To protect this shell
Of sanity so thin and fine
One crack and it's likely
To fall into a million pieces
Like shards of the shattered window
Glimpsing into my soul
Wanting that love
But wary of the struggle
Been fighting so long
Not sure I can still
Put up a good front.
So while I mend
What is left
Of this twisted mess
At arms reach I'll remain.
Comments
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Longing, yet fear. Lot of mixed emotion. Very passionate and deep. Very good.
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While i think i like the overall poem, it sounds choppy. When you continue a phrase to the next line in the middle of a thought, it doesn't always sound very good. Also, i would like to see this split up into separate stanzas maybe. Find a way to separate and organize your thoughts in a creative way to create great works of art.
Great work though, and keep writing!
- Cass
three applause for you. : )
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