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Thank You.

 

 

 

 

 

 

The sky can not fall from hands that hold it
even when shaky and weak from misuse,
horizons bleed between fingers that split
while hanging many years by withered noose.
Storms come and go above the swaying crown
leaving behind tears in puddles of dirt,
unearthed are roots struggling to not drown  
in the sudden downpours that carry hurt.
Relish the sunrise far away from touch
painting rainbows upon the edge of day,
calling upon the sun's strength as a crutch
to wash away lingering clouds of gray.
Upon me you are shining ever bright
and I hold onto you throughout the night.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Nom de Plume
    November 11

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    love the use of nature as your metaphors first off, shes my favourite lady...

    "Relish the sunrise far away from touch
    painting rainbows upon the edge of day,
    calling upon the sun's strength as a crutch
    to wash away lingering clouds of gray."

    these lines I enjoyed the most, they flow effortlessly and really capture the dawning of love (well, thats what I perceive from them).

    who wouldnt want to be thought of as the closing couplet suggests..


  • SteveS gold member
    November 7
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    Lucky guy, the one saying "You're welcome" here. Beautiful poetry, my friend.


  • Night Hope gold member
    November 7

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    Indeed, this is a sonnet, and a lovely one at that, Ann. It is difficult enough to pen from purest emotions, let alone in rhyme AND in iambic pentameter. Most impressive, my Friend.