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now he tells me


I am the one he thinks of
in the cold dark reality of night

but how do I get past
all the yesterdays

when silence was the only thing
that kept me warm






Author notes

Prompt:
Alright so here's the deal-
write up to 6 lines of poetry,
genre being whatever you
fancy.

In a list

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  • perfectsunset gold member
    November 9

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    such a lovely piece!

    Thanks for entering & best of luck


  • Pure Thought silver member
    November 6

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    ... and silence just isn't all that warm.


  • geckogirl silver member
    November 6

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    I am hearing your every word sis


  • Lucian Valcor
    November 6
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    sorry i just read the contest notes my bad, even so later on you should add to it


  • Lucian Valcor
    November 6

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    very deep but way way to short you left the ending waay open there was no closing to the poem you should expand on it it would add a lot more to the poem

    Advocatus"


    • fortyninereasons gold member
      November 7
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      with some relationships there is no ending.


      thank you for reading and your comment
      Juls


  • Cannonsfire
    November 6

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    C


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    November 6

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    ideally together.

    nicely written.

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