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The Best Day of My Life

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I'm three years old

my favorite things are crayons,

ice cream and footed pajamas.

 

Leo the lion is my best friend.

After I brush my teeth and say my prayers,

Mom tucks us both in

 

so he can watch over me all night,

since my Daddy's gone off to fight

all the bad guys overseas.

 

Every morning and every night I pray

then look out the window to see

if Daddy has come back home to me.

 

Today was the best day of my life

because when I looked out the window

Daddy was there smiling at me.

 

 

Author notes

Picture Prompt: Joy by Marient @ deviantART.com

This picture reminded me of how happy a child is when their parents come home. Dedicated to all the servicemen and servicewomen out there, and their families.

Thank you for your courage and selflessness.

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Comments

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  • kdom
    November 12
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    This left me with a smile. I can almost hear a child's voice as I read it. beautifully done.


  • parenchma
    November 10
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    This is delightful. Spent last weekend with my 3 year old grandson. Stings a bit, they live far away.


  • Emerald Dog
    November 9
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    Allie, this is such a beautiful and yet stark reminder of the the reality of war and skirmish. Behind the simplicity of the child's reality, you pack immense power that really rattles to the core. Tremendous and well deserving of the trophy. Congrats.

    L&P, Kx


  • The Drifter
    November 9
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    Touching, a dream come true for those waiting at home. A sweet fairytale with a fairytale ending, would it were that simple. Thank your for this poem through a child's eyes. Thank you for sharing.


  • HereComesTheSun
    November 8
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    awww this piece just brought a warm feeling to my heart.
    it also really hit me becuase the guy in my life is off to war soon and i jsut want him to stay here and never leave.

    great work my friend.


    • Auburn Sunrise gold member
      November 8
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      Thank you for the compliment.

      I'm very sorry that your guy has to leave soon... I understand that you just want him to stay. I am much too selfish and neurotic to have a man in the military. When my husband and I first met, he had just finished sniper training and was planning on enlisting in the military or Secret Service.

      Selfishly, I said that I would break up with him if he did.

      The truth is, I just couldn't bear the thought of him being put in harm's way or being away from me for so long... I really wouldn't have broken up with him. Or maybe I would have? I don't know...

      Anyway, I hope things work out for you guys and I'll keep you both in my thoughts.

      Thanks again.


  • Dreamer With Dreams silver member
    November 8
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    This is so adorable and very sweet!
    I love your take on the prompt!
    This definitely put a big smile on my face.
    Nicely penned!
    Congrats on winning silver!

    Safely hidden within her fantasies,

    ~ Dreamer With Dreams


    • Auburn Sunrise gold member
      November 8
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      Thank you for the wonderful comment.
      Your avatar pic is wicked. You look gorgeous.


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    November 7

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    'grats on the Silver

    when I read 'footed pajamas' I had a flash of 'City of Angels'; the young child Nicholas Cage takes "home" loved footed pajamas and I think she was around that age in the movie too - rather adorable to see it here as well

    this whole poem is softly sweet, innocent and plain beautiful; what child doesn't adore seeing their Daddy come home, I know I was confused when mine did when I was 3 but theres too long a story behind that

    Bravo on a beautiful poem!
    made me smile this morning




  • SpydurPoet gold member
    November 7

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    Aww! This is so sweet and beautifully written. You did a fantastic job with the prompt.
    Thanks for entering the contest & best of luck.
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


    • Auburn Sunrise gold member
      November 7
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      Thank you so much for the silver!!! I totally didn't expect that

      You have awesome contests, little lady!


  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    November 7

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    UR Amazing
    Wish you the best of luck....o0o0o0o0 I did not know you were in jess's group as well..she is just the sweetest person and an awesome poetess
    Spyders family is the most awesome[ist] family ssss David


  • Pure Thought silver member
    November 6

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    Oh, this is great!!! Nice dedication in your ANs.

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